Six Sentence Sunday – 1/29/2012

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We make some progress in the meeting between Jason and Sam, and we’ve finally discovered what happened to Father Joe.  Here’s another six.

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“No”, Jason said, dropping to one knee at the base of the steps.

Immediately he checked Father Joe’s pulse.  Nothing.  Jason peered back up at Sam with tears glimmering in his eyes.

“You did this”, Jason said.

Sam held the banister and grinned.

I like where it’s going, and I hope you do too.  As always, feel free to leave a comment or a correction.  I welcome all criticism and use it to get better.

See you next Sunday!

Rob

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12 thoughts on “Six Sentence Sunday – 1/29/2012

  1. Cara Bristol says:

    Great use of “showing” rather than telling. Enjoyed this.

  2. Alix Cameron says:

    I’m enjoying the comparison your making between the tears and the grin. Great work.

  3. OOOH! Sam GRINNED?! Sounds like you’ve got some interesting problems here! Can’t wait to read more.

  4. I already don’t like Sam. 🙂 Thanks for sharing. Great six!

  5. Took me to unexpected places in a short snippet. As Steven said, “Nice and creepy.”

  6. This is my first time stopping in to read your SSS and I’ll definitely be back, great six! I agree with the others, nice and creepy!

  7. Karysa Faire says:

    Well that’s creepy! Why would she grin? Tension is fantastic. I’ll be back next week. . .

  8. Oh wow, very compelling six! Loved the contrast that immediately popped into my head when the grief stricken Jason sees Sam grinning! Great 6!

  9. Vivien Dean says:

    Tight and evocative. Well done!

  10. Monica Enderle Pierce says:

    Oooh, disturbing. I like it!

  11. Dee Carney says:

    He *grinned*?! Oh em gee, he’s a stinker! Very nicely done!

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